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"Anachronisem" Feedback - commentary encouraged!
« on: October 08, 2004, 03:41:40 AM »
Please comment.  I want all the feedback I can get.  I have been encouraged to, and hope to publish this when done.  This was begun over on TFS, and continues here.  It starts rather abrupt, as I had not saved the first few entries, and intended to rewrite those anyway.
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« Reply #1 on: October 08, 2004, 06:57:47 AM »
 Finally! Was having story withdrawal!
  Sorry about Sam.  WD

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« Reply #2 on: October 12, 2004, 08:35:25 AM »
I did not know this was here.  I sent you an email pard.  You got a real nack for the written word.  You gotta finish this.  I mean this is classic cowboy.  Does he save the girl????????????  Tune in next time.

Well HURRY UP WITH NEXT TIME.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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« Reply #3 on: October 16, 2004, 10:17:33 PM »
MORE!
 How that for  comment?
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« Reply #4 on: October 17, 2004, 01:08:54 AM »
Drydock mi compadre,

Your writing matches any adventure, techno, saga, I've read! ;D  As I said in my e-mail, I was of the opinion that it was a published work and I wanted to know where to go get it.  Good luck in getting a publisher, 'cause I want to read the completed work! ;) believe, my friend, I sat and read from your starting to the end of what you have on CAS-City, thats how good I thought it was!

BB ;)
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« Reply #5 on: October 18, 2004, 04:41:13 AM »
The did what to her? >:( >:( >:(

Can we go back to the moutains, revive them and kill them again, then revive them just so we can kill them again?  and again and again?

You invoking strong emotion pard.  Keep it comming.


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« Reply #6 on: October 19, 2004, 07:42:59 PM »
Well, Sarge, you had me hooked by the second or third installment.  This is good.  Keep up the good work.  And, watch your own backside, over there; and get home safe.
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« Reply #7 on: October 30, 2004, 02:45:15 PM »
  ;)  ;D

Okay!  Now you really went and did it!  As I read todays episode, my gut got all tingly, and tightened up as if it was me in that cockpit.  What a thrill.  Now what !?! !?! !?!   ;D
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« Reply #8 on: October 30, 2004, 07:37:40 PM »
Yep, I too keep checkin' for the next installment! :o  I will be lookin' forward to your description and tidbits of history on the P-40.  Great looking warbird, but most of what I've read about it was that it was overshadowed by the zero, P-38 Lightning, the F-4U Corsair, P-51 Mustang, etc. etc. I'd like to hear some good things about it!!  Also, is the budding relationship between Tip and Helene over with his escape?  Hmmmm, have to wait and see!  Great story!

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« Reply #9 on: November 05, 2004, 12:07:28 PM »
modern day dog fight.   ;D ;D

Keep it up.


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« Reply #10 on: November 12, 2004, 12:32:42 AM »
Yee-haa!!!

Glad to see you're back, Sarge.  This has really got me goin', here. 8) ;D
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« Reply #11 on: November 18, 2004, 12:22:53 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D  That Mustang is a worry, though.  >:( >:(
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« Reply #12 on: November 18, 2004, 06:18:31 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D use to be I check CAS-City first thing, now its even better, first thing I check is to see if you have a new installment! ;D ;D  Then I read it!  Hey, you would not have an evil streak in ya?  Like, we be readin' this exciting story and you get close to the end and then say "To be continued, read the book!" ha ha ::)

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« Reply #13 on: November 18, 2004, 08:35:00 PM »
One more and he makes Ace! If he gets the Warhawk down in one piece, the kill markings ought to be really interesting.
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« Reply #14 on: November 19, 2004, 04:13:05 AM »
Keep it comming pard.  I won't be in here for a week cause I'm doing the vacation thing.  Feel free to finish this while I'm gone.  Hint hint. ;D


And Bucky, that is not even a funny.   Don't be giving him any ideas.


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« Reply #15 on: November 19, 2004, 09:37:52 AM »
Oh, you'll get the complete story here.  But I warn you, if this gets published, the off line version has been editied.  Clean up and details for the most part, but its fun to read the on line version and compare it to the edited off line story and see the different touchs.

It'll be 5 Iranian Peacocks BTW.  The stylized bird that sits at the center of the Iranian flag.
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« Reply #16 on: November 19, 2004, 07:18:10 PM »
So.............
yer not there yet? ;)
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« Reply #17 on: November 21, 2004, 04:57:45 AM »
Workin' on it. . . :P
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« Reply #18 on: November 22, 2004, 01:02:08 AM »
 ;D ;D ;D

I betcha, I betcha, Tip gets the girl somehow!! ;)  He does doesn't he? :o :o  One thing we do know, he's lost a lot of his own blood in this story! :o

keep the story comin' and most importantly keep your head down!

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« Reply #19 on: November 24, 2004, 10:18:52 AM »
Well, I want to say "WHEW" here, but something tells me the last shoe has not yet dropped.  Good story; keep it up.  And, THANKS.   ;D ;) :)
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